Redshift
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Posted : Oct 3, 2011 10:59
Hey,
Couple of problems you have with this track, I think. Firstly, the total lack of variation in the track makes it boring. The whole of the middle section from 2:00 to 6:00 is essentially the same. I know you add percussion layers and some leads during that time but the leads are way too low in the mix and adding the perc layers do not alter the character of the music. Its just the same, with more stuff added.
I think you should be adding more ambient sounds and sweeps and stuff to fill it out a bit. Your bass is too weak - you need to lift it a lot. Make longer breaks and add break build-ups. This type of thing is the "punctuation" of music. Your track has no punctuation: its like listening to a newsreader who uses no punctuation. Each sentence flows into the next without a break or a pause.
The part from 4:50 to 6:00 begs and screams for something different. Change the key, or the bass pattern (preferably both). Slap a melody in the relative major/minor key on top. (If your track is in C major, change the key to its relative minor (Am) - do the melody and new bass line in the new key)
From 6:00 onwards its just back to what came before.
So, my message to you in one word is: variety. Otherwise you lose your listener after the first 20 seconds.
Cheers and good luck
Andre
psy#groover
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Posted : Oct 3, 2011 11:13
thank u for the feedback Andre.
i will try to do the things u pointing!!
will update u with a new version soon.
thanx again!!
xD
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e-scape
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Posted : Oct 3, 2011 11:20
I think you should compress the kick it sounds to me like there is too much low-end in it...And mixing is the problem n.2,sounds are good but you should definitely spice the track a bit with more interesting sounds or short breaks IMO.
psy#groover
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Posted : Oct 3, 2011 11:30
thanx or the comment e-scape. i ll try to cut some lows from the kick in the next export!! ps.i have 5 inche monitor so i cant hear all of my lows freqswww.myspace.com/solargroovee
faxinadu
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Posted : Oct 3, 2011 13:11
i like how it builds very slow and the nintendo sounds.
the groove reminds me a bit of atmos - cable enable, wich alone is a huge compliment
but the tb sound itself, it is too much of a clean vst sound. i can place my money it is either audiorealism or maun tau. i go with audiorealism? + the steinberg bitcrusher? more processing, just a tad, make that sound either fatter or more unique, as it is your main sound in the track.
good sound, maybe lacks some brightness it is very filtered throughout even the hats and such, try opening it up a little.
orange
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Posted : Oct 3, 2011 18:27
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On 2011-10-03 11:20, e-scape wrote:
I think you should compress the kick it sounds to me like there is too much low-end in it...And mixing is the problem n.2,sounds are good but you should definitely spice the track a bit with more interesting sounds or short breaks IMO.
if it has too much bass in it he needs to eq and not compress...
psy#groover
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Posted : Oct 3, 2011 20:36
firstly i wanna thank u both for ur time to listening and commenting on my music!!
secondly
@faxi what u mean tb sound? u are refering to the lead sound?? as far for the kik i passed i thhrouht oxford eq so now it should be better at lows..
@fat data what u mean by muffled?? it is about the overal mixingor some certain sound??
faxinadu
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Posted : Oct 4, 2011 01:07
yah the lead sound, it is not horrible at all don't get me wrong, just a little bit too thin and uninspiring, could add for example in certain spots the same midi part exactly, but done with another synth layered with the one you have, will create a nice "buildup" just by inserting an extra layer in a good spot.
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Posted : Oct 5, 2011 09:56
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On 2011-10-03 10:59, Andre_H wrote:
Couple of problems you have with this track, I think. Firstly, the total lack of variation in the track makes it boring. The whole of the middle section from 2:00 to 6:00 is essentially the same. I know you add percussion layers and some leads during that time but the leads are way too low in the mix and adding the perc layers do not alter the character of the music. Its just the same, with more stuff added.
I think you should be adding more ambient sounds and sweeps and stuff to fill it out a bit. Your bass is too weak - you need to lift it a lot. Make longer breaks and add break build-ups. This type of thing is the "punctuation" of music. Your track has no punctuation: its like listening to a newsreader who uses no punctuation. Each sentence flows into the next without a break or a pause.
The part from 4:50 to 6:00 begs and screams for something different. Change the key, or the bass pattern (preferably both). Slap a melody in the relative major/minor key on top. (If your track is in C major, change the key to its relative minor (Am) - do the melody and new bass line in the new key)
From 6:00 onwards its just back to what came before.
So, my message to you in one word is: variety. Otherwise you lose your listener after the first 20 seconds.
Wow wow wow .. Andre .. Thats a real comment !!! You know what .. ? I read your comment and i say to myself 'Hey .. This is my comment .. Why HE took it (From me)/Wrote it ?' - Word by word !
So im with this guy .
+1000
psy#groover
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Posted : Oct 7, 2011 15:03
