willsanquil
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Posted : Apr 29, 2010 03:15:27
My newest tune...looking for criticism, one question I have in particular is...are the leads too 'happy' sounding? On my next tune I picked a minor scale specifically but with this tune I just kind of picked what sounded good at the moment and I'm worried about it being a bit cheesy, which is not what I'm going for.
Hope I'm not displeasing the isra overlords by posting this in two sections but I didn't get any response on the 'new tracks' sub-section under 'help' so I figured I would post it here as well!
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L66
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Posted : Apr 29, 2010 03:29
Yeah my thoughts exact...turn down the cheese! haha.
The lead has a funky swing to it try experimenting what fits i guess, it kinda hovers over the whole song.
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Posted : Apr 29, 2010 22:35
good buildup. i like the feel of this tune.
good bassy drive.
to answer your question;
i don't get a happy vibe, just a likabale weird trippy vibe.
except for,
the only 'poingky' sound i don't like is the lead you introduce @1.18 -this lead spreads a cheesy vibe .
but it changes into something really nice at 3.05(very good part) onwards. then it returns to that 'poinky'at 3.30
for the most part it's very nice.
from listening to your older stuff, you're making good progress.
*eLliSDee*
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Posted : Apr 29, 2010 22:47
on 2nd thought,
i like 'Is This Real' better
willsanquil
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Posted : Apr 29, 2010 23:22
Thanks very much to both of you - I do agree that that lead @ 1.18 is not the best (ie too cheesy) and without it or with something different in its sonic space it would improve the track a bit.
the like-able weird trippy vibe is more of what I was going towards, but I have this problem where I can't seem to resist writing call and response melodic little lead bits...need to do more work on groove building with FX and stuff, but I appreciate the feedback a lot.
How about technical side of things? I agree that I like the end result in terms of feel of "is this real" more, but I think the kick/bass sounds cleaner in this track?
I realize the leads are a bit cheesy, but is it muddy cheese or can you distinctly smell the different layers? If you want to make an apple pie from scratch...you must first invent the universe
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Posted : Apr 30, 2010 20:41
ok, i listened on the headphones before but i had a proper listen on the monitors now.
another thing i like is the 'ringy-zipper stereo lead fx' thoughout the song
The kick is clear and punchy the whole song.
The bass-line sounds clear and fine and it has good distinction from 0 to1.40 and 4.20 to end. it looses a little distinction in the middle 1.50 to 3.50 but is does'nt matter. i think its only becuase it is low and short. don't know what it sound like solo so i can't say.
Do you have any processes on the master?
On the headphones the leads and atmos sounds loud enough. On the monitors the kick&bass sounds loud so the leads and FX softer. --more the FX
I don't think that its masking the lead and FX, i thnk it is simply a bit heavy.
BUT i think this is something that can be addressed in mastering stage with multiband compression.
anyway, this is my amature opinion.
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Posted : May 19, 2010 12:16
trippy track, but I dont like the lead @5:40....
make it more dynamic, for example through pan.
(try bitcrusher =))
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Ascension
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Posted : May 19, 2010 16:55
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Posted : May 21, 2010 13:47
i didn't listen it to seriously but i tell you what you need to fix from short listening.
your mix lacks highs (hihats and stuff).
you need to work on your writing. your melodies are not so melodies. you normally needs to write on the "chord" which is the bassline. so if your bassline is A most of the track so you are at A minor scale so most of the notes or your melody would be A,C,E. you don't have just to play that notes but mostly. because these notes are harmonic to the bassline.
change the role of the bassline few times at the track. it's boring to hear all the time the same tune doing the same thing.
work harder on your leads sounds.
but your overall sound is much better than i heard from you before. you made big improvment. keep it up and you'll be there!
