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My 1st song need your critics and feedback !!!
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ambient
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Posted : Nov 5, 2006 18:11
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Yidam
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Posted : Nov 6, 2006 00:28
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Wowwww! Wow! Wowww! If thats the first you've made I can't wait to hear a full-fledged production.
Gorgeous track.... lovely soundscapes. Very nice guitar work.
Amazing work Cristoff. Please keep them coming  |
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knocz
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Posted : Nov 6, 2006 02:44
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I think it is a little repetitive.
try exporting the lines (drums,bass,pads) into wave and then add some effects w/automations. and some variations..
Try puting some mutes is the drums so it becomes a little more impredictable,adding a little breakbeat to it.
not my style i like some more bass and a little less atmosphere. And more variations.
Continue the hard work
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bukboy
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Posted : Nov 6, 2006 08:06
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On the whole very pleasant.
It needs more interest. Take it somewhere.
Also If I were involved id make the bass guitar line a bit funkier, and the picked guitar line more interesting and complex. Dont b afraid to use dissonance for interest, or chromatic notes, or some modulation. |
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vector_0
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Posted : Nov 6, 2006 17:36
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great track man...seriously.
The only criticism I can offer is that this track might warrent a phatter bass drum sound |
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Chambao
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Posted : Nov 6, 2006 17:55
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Liked it very much.
Though knocz is right, it is a bit repetitive.
i didnt like the guitar (?) melody at minute 2:40 - 3:00
i dont know why, it sounds good but it doesnt have variety.
the pads in the background keep moving in the same direction, try making a break in the middle of the song, and changing the pad melody.
also, u gotta do something about the drums, i dunno, maybe a break? dont change them completely, just change their melody from time to time, and then continue with your original melody.
the guitar keeps coming back and back =\
i dont think u need more effects though, as an ambient\chill its very good.
very repetitive though again, im already in minute 6:39, and its the same thing as in the begining, the guitar is really bothering me, try adding something to it, a stronger reeverb maybe, or make it more of a beep noise than a guitar sample.
well overall that was good, very good!
but repetitive as hell, if u dont have anything more to put in, just wait until u get more inspiration to continue the song, dont go looping it around
just an advice 
Pinkadelic
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Midnight_Bloom
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Posted : Nov 6, 2006 21:27
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Wow ! this is beautiful!
Good job ! |
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clovisfilho
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Posted : Nov 7, 2006 10:04
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great track, I do agree about the bass though.
Keep us posted about future tracks!
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