D7uan
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Posted : Mar 1, 2012 18:15:20
I took all of your advice and came up with this....I think it has much better sound than the rest of my tracks....let me know what you all think....and of course looking forward to hearing from you guys as to what I can do to improve....thanks in advance
greyball
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Posted : Mar 2, 2012 16:33
it sounds like shit, to be completely honest.
lack of elements, effects and groove.
the melodies are too fucked up for my taste. it really sounds like a bad case of tone deafness. were you high while making this?
just my thoughts on this track, dont mean to sound harsh.
diskonekt
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Posted : Mar 2, 2012 18:47
yes.
Peace, Love, Death metal
knocz
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Posted : Mar 2, 2012 19:05
I think it has REALLY nice ideas, with a great flow. Many strive to be able to tell a story, but you were able to put it through.
However, the sounds are just lame. It starts with a kick that seems like it passed through a bit crusher, and the bass doesn't correspond. Try synthesizing your own kick, it's extreemely easy (sine wav with a pitch bend) and change your bass to fit. The blip sounds are just annoying, eq it an put it lower in the mix, so it's no so noticable. Also, use some filter automations and tape delays with time automation so the blips aren't always the same, so from 1:18 to 1:45 the blips only come out of the delay
From 2:44 to 3:04, I think I realised what you wanted but it's not quite there.. I'd change it to a blues scale, abusing the 6th, with a lot of filter automation, just trying to get a groovy cool vibe.
Final raise lost it's place, the kick buildup just sounds poorly edited and the final lead isn't satisfying. Use lower octaves in your synth parts (with the bass cut off with an eq). Or a guitar, I love guitars (headbanger here)
D7uan
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Posted : Mar 2, 2012 21:41
lol....I actually had a really bad cold and kept on smoking weed through out the track...I know that no excuse but I guess thats what made me rush through this track...but anyways all excuses aside...
I guess im alittle scared of synthing my own kick but Ill get started on that....blues scale sounds good never tried it always stick to Maj and min, im tring to implement a little chromatic here and there but thats about it...this is the first track ive actually used alot of FM on.....and definitley will use more filter automation and tape delays on bleeps from now own (hadnt really given it much thought)....thanks knocz looks like I got a lot of homework ahead of me....sounds fun
Argonauticus
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Posted : Mar 3, 2012 03:15
Hi . Not bad beat, I think this track need a more instruments , and little bit work with melody and effects when you do this ,you see effect on your eyes I think so . peace
when you do this ,you see effect on your eyes I think so . peace