I like to think (and
the sooner the better!)
of a cybernetic meadow
where mammals and computers
live together in mutually
programming harmony
like pure water
touching clear sky.
I like to think
(right now please!)
of a cybernetic forest
filled with pines and electronics
where deer stroll peacefully
past computers
as if they were flowers
with spinning blossoms.
I like to think
(it has to be!)
of a cybernetic ecology
where we are free of our labors
and joined back to nature,
returned to our mammal
brothers and sisters,
and all watched over
by machines of loving grace.
Richard Brautigen (1967)
RhinoCeros
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Posted : Feb 29, 2016 15:43
Interesting i like the mechanics of the poem the song does seem peacfull and elegant to be in the wild hehe
the kick is a little loud or to clicky might be too compresed or just me,, only a thought though ... best wishes and at 2:45 a bigger sweep rather than the reverse clash would be better, after that the clashes are also a bit too long shorter might be better. also the clashes seem very repetitive and a bit distracting... maybe add some stabs with long delay echo,etc
Love and light :):)
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Posted : Feb 29, 2016 19:04
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On 2016-02-29 15:43, RhinoCeros wrote:
Interesting i like the mechanics of the poem the song does seem peacfull and elegant to be in the wild hehe
the kick is a little loud or to clicky might be too compresed or just me,, only a thought though ... best wishes and at 2:45 a bigger sweep rather than the reverse clash would be better, after that the clashes are also a bit too long shorter might be better. also the clashes seem very repetitive and a bit distracting... maybe add some stabs with long delay echo,etc
Love and light :):)
Hi!
Yes, yes, and yes! You are right The kick little loud, and i “over use” the clashes. Thank you for your advices! Maybe later i will modify/remix/remaster my tracks
Regards,
Laszlo
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Posted : Feb 29, 2016 23:59
Inspired by R. Brautigan’s poem and tribute to Kraftwerk 
